Kidney Stones draftv2

Please leave comments. I need as much help as possible, or at least not help but say what's wrong and don't help me fix it.

May 1 2009

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Jian Mei! I think you did

emishkin's picture

Jian Mei! I think you did such a great job. Congratulations on completing your first piece!

The major issue, as Joe has said, is the sound in the hallway scene. I think you're on top of that - getting Robbie/Spencer to re-record - but during the critique it was also suggested to add in hospital sounds. You can probably find some online.

Other nitpicky edits:
Add some audio transitions in between cuts so it's a smoother transition.
The scene where Robbie says he used to be depressed should be cut tighter (trim off a bit at the end before moving to the next shot).

Great work!

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