I am sure that this script has many typos, errors, and needs some revision due to a fusion of being rushed by Spencer and just simple human error. I will work on and fix this later(I need to find my thinking cap)
Submitted by rcarter on February 27, 2009 - 5:46pm.
So I read your script. Its a good start! I think it definitely has some funny moments in there. But I think it could be fleshed out a little more. Some of the dialogue, such as Mike's talk with his mom, seems very deep and a bit too serious for a comedy. I also don't quite see what the conflict is. It seems more of just a random occurrence than a big story. If thats what you want it to be, then i think you need to just add more. If not, then definitely define the conflict more and create more of a struggle.
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I am sure that this script
I am sure that this script has many typos, errors, and needs some revision due to a fusion of being rushed by Spencer and just simple human error. I will work on and fix this later(I need to find my thinking cap)
Please give me feedback...
Please give me feedback...
So I read your script. Its a
So I read your script. Its a good start! I think it definitely has some funny moments in there. But I think it could be fleshed out a little more. Some of the dialogue, such as Mike's talk with his mom, seems very deep and a bit too serious for a comedy. I also don't quite see what the conflict is. It seems more of just a random occurrence than a big story. If thats what you want it to be, then i think you need to just add more. If not, then definitely define the conflict more and create more of a struggle.
okay so the link for the
okay so the link for the aging makeup is http://www.indymogul.com/post/1300/build-plans-how-to-create-aging-make-up
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