Endocrine Disruptor Film-- comments from critique

I was unable to post my rough cut on my blog, but I will hopefully have it posted soon.

Please post comments here from the critique.

Thanks!

Comments

Hey Alla, I think we went

emishkin's picture

Hey Alla,
I think we went over all the comments I had for you from the critique, but let me know if you have more questions!

erin

ENDOCHRINE - very clear and

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ENDOCHRINE
- very clear and good pacing. You lead us through all the information slowly and carefully. This is a subject that I think a lot of us are unclear on so it’s really helpful and professional of you how you arranged your documentary.
- I think there are a lot of still images and the most intriguing part of what I saw were the interviews! I know its not fair to judge what I saw because it’s only a small piece but I hope there is more people talking coming up!

JOE'S COMMENTS Quality of

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JOE'S COMMENTS
Quality of images low. Full resolution export.
Maybe highlight some stuff on the chart
Text not needed “ what is an endocrine disruptor”
BPA – I forgot how we got on BPA
Stylize the images with text.
Not thrilled with the background of the images
Shots of people during person’s long description is too long. Needs to be cut up with someone else.

STUDENTS COMMENTS
Really liked how it was put together.
Bouncy text seems strange choice.
Text on screen seems slow.
List of products with BPA shorter might be helpful. Maybe less on the voice over.
Structure good, pacing is nice. Maybe put in touchy music.
More b-roll for interviews would be helpful.
It didn’t feel like 5 minutes. Engaging.
Don’t really need titles.
Lower third on 2nd woman so we know who she is.
Sharp and professional. Lots of good details.

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