LEMONADE
- I want to start with that I think this is super clean, neat, and really well executed. You can definitely tell that you have a lot of experience doing this and that a lot of work was done in pre production to make sure that you got everything you needed while you were shooting. What a veteran!
- Great colors. The actress was really great and I’m glad that you paid a lot of attention and took a lot of time to make her costumes noticeably different to represent different days. That was key.
- The mom was also scary and awesome!
- I was wondering if you were trying to make this an awkward interaction between Zack and the woman. Just out of curiosity… the woman is so forward! It’s a bold move.
- I also like that you stayed close during their conversations I think it made it more intimate.
JOE'S COMMENTS
Sound is 20x better.
I did like how you had her shoes before we see her.
Can you start his dialogue with mom, over the opening credits with more restaurant shots.
Slower fade out. From first scene.
Need a shot of her in 2nd scene before “I’m, fine”
I like the music, but the ending is too deliberate
STUDENTS COMMENTS
Extreemely well put together. Easy to follow. Great.
Good. Got suspicious of lady.
Really sleek. Pulls you in and you know something is going to twust at the end. Change everything,
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LEMONADE - I want to start
LEMONADE
- I want to start with that I think this is super clean, neat, and really well executed. You can definitely tell that you have a lot of experience doing this and that a lot of work was done in pre production to make sure that you got everything you needed while you were shooting. What a veteran!
- Great colors. The actress was really great and I’m glad that you paid a lot of attention and took a lot of time to make her costumes noticeably different to represent different days. That was key.
- The mom was also scary and awesome!
- I was wondering if you were trying to make this an awkward interaction between Zack and the woman. Just out of curiosity… the woman is so forward! It’s a bold move.
- I also like that you stayed close during their conversations I think it made it more intimate.
JOE'S COMMENTS Sound is 20x
JOE'S COMMENTS
Sound is 20x better.
I did like how you had her shoes before we see her.
Can you start his dialogue with mom, over the opening credits with more restaurant shots.
Slower fade out. From first scene.
Need a shot of her in 2nd scene before “I’m, fine”
I like the music, but the ending is too deliberate
STUDENTS COMMENTS
Extreemely well put together. Easy to follow. Great.
Good. Got suspicious of lady.
Really sleek. Pulls you in and you know something is going to twust at the end. Change everything,
Set up really well.
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