LIMEWIRE
- This was so intense! I’m psyched to see you do something really out there! Your actors were great especially the interrogator.
- I think it would be really helpful if you have the time and the actors to shoot a quick scene of the police approaching the house. This could really build up suspense!
- I liked the music playing while he was downloading. Would you be able to put Fur Elise over when he is getting arrested? It would be a nice touch and ironic that the song he is getting arrested for is playing. If not I think there should be some music or sound effects during that scene because it is a little bare.
- There were just some minor editing things that can be fixed really easily. Like some black in between cuts that you can go back and get rid of in a snap. I know we saw an older version of it so the interrogation scene is much shorter. I think if you put a lot of fast cuts of the interrogator asking questions and make it a choppier scene it will add to the intensity and suspense!
- Can’t wait to see the courtroom scene where he is sentenced to jail! Great way to end it. I learned my lesson! I will never illegally download again!
JOE'S COMMENTS
Need sound effects on computer scene
Interrogation scene is way too long. Already went over this with you.
This is a piece about interrogation, not downloading.
Weird ending. What happened to the judge says he is found guilty and is going to jail for end of life.
Need some sound effect on “Launch”
STUDENTS COMMENTS
Heart Wrenching
Very impressed. A few edits to black.
Fuzziness.
FINAL EDITS (from Joe)
First scene
Gain needs to be increased so that it is above -12 and below 0
Smooth out the sound transitions
The dramatic music should lead us into the 2nd scene
Need a hit on the launch
Add footsteps to guys coming in the house
Play with the level of fur elise when you cut to the footsteps, either drop it low or eliminate it
Make the commando team slow motion
Interrogation scene needs some type of stressful background sound effect or music
Hard cuts quick cuts
Richard! I love how it starts with a wide shot and has an after school special type opening and then the ominous music comes in.
Great cutting to the music with the close-ups of limewire.
Very timely piece!
My big feedback was needing to cut the interrogation scene (which you did - you could cut the bit where the interrogator hits the main character - looked fake).
Need sound effects while going online (keys typing, clicking, etc.)
Need to smooth the audio transitions.
Need to build suspense with the interrogation team moving into the house.
I know you've done a lot of work on it since the critique and can't wait to see how it's developed! Great great work!!!
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LIMEWIRE - This was so
LIMEWIRE
- This was so intense! I’m psyched to see you do something really out there! Your actors were great especially the interrogator.
- I think it would be really helpful if you have the time and the actors to shoot a quick scene of the police approaching the house. This could really build up suspense!
- I liked the music playing while he was downloading. Would you be able to put Fur Elise over when he is getting arrested? It would be a nice touch and ironic that the song he is getting arrested for is playing. If not I think there should be some music or sound effects during that scene because it is a little bare.
- There were just some minor editing things that can be fixed really easily. Like some black in between cuts that you can go back and get rid of in a snap. I know we saw an older version of it so the interrogation scene is much shorter. I think if you put a lot of fast cuts of the interrogator asking questions and make it a choppier scene it will add to the intensity and suspense!
- Can’t wait to see the courtroom scene where he is sentenced to jail! Great way to end it. I learned my lesson! I will never illegally download again!
JOE'S COMMENTS Need sound
JOE'S COMMENTS
Need sound effects on computer scene
Interrogation scene is way too long. Already went over this with you.
This is a piece about interrogation, not downloading.
Weird ending. What happened to the judge says he is found guilty and is going to jail for end of life.
Need some sound effect on “Launch”
STUDENTS COMMENTS
Heart Wrenching
Very impressed. A few edits to black.
Fuzziness.
FINAL EDITS (from Joe)
First scene
Gain needs to be increased so that it is above -12 and below 0
Smooth out the sound transitions
The dramatic music should lead us into the 2nd scene
Need a hit on the launch
Add footsteps to guys coming in the house
Play with the level of fur elise when you cut to the footsteps, either drop it low or eliminate it
Make the commando team slow motion
Interrogation scene needs some type of stressful background sound effect or music
Hard cuts quick cuts
Richard! I love how it starts
Richard! I love how it starts with a wide shot and has an after school special type opening and then the ominous music comes in.
Great cutting to the music with the close-ups of limewire.
Very timely piece!
My big feedback was needing to cut the interrogation scene (which you did - you could cut the bit where the interrogator hits the main character - looked fake).
Need sound effects while going online (keys typing, clicking, etc.)
Need to smooth the audio transitions.
Need to build suspense with the interrogation team moving into the house.
I know you've done a lot of work on it since the critique and can't wait to see how it's developed! Great great work!!!
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